Hey man, its a decent start for a beginner man, and see you have fixed up those things KKD mention. Im not a Hi-res modder, more AKI, but from looking at it the facepaint looks much improved and the hairline is better.
I think someone who knows more than I do will be able to advise you more, but Im impressed man for a 1st try, and you listen to advice so thats gonna get you far. :B-)
Also I will move this to the Texture mods section bro. This is the public section that can be viewed openly (By Guests), and it will get more views in our main section bro.
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